silence7@slrpnk.net to News@lemmy.worldEnglish · 4 days agoU.S. citizen shot from behind as he warned ICE agents about children gathering at bus stop, lawyers saywww.latimes.comexternal-linkmessage-square70linkfedilinkarrow-up1533file-text
arrow-up1533external-linkU.S. citizen shot from behind as he warned ICE agents about children gathering at bus stop, lawyers saywww.latimes.comsilence7@slrpnk.net to News@lemmy.worldEnglish · 4 days agomessage-square70linkfedilinkfile-text
minus-squareNo_Ones_Slick_Like_Gaston@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up53·4 days agoICE executes a US citizen with a shot in the back of the head in front of children. Here, I fixed the headline for you.
minus-squaresilence7@slrpnk.netOPlinkfedilinkarrow-up109·4 days agoPer the article: unnecessarily shot in the back of his right shoulder where a bullet remains lodged He is still alive
minus-squareD_C@sh.itjust.workslinkfedilinkarrow-up23·edit-24 days agoICE attempts to murder a US citizen with a shot in the back of the head in front of children. Nailed it?
minus-squareRestrictedAccount@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up2·3 days agoOkay this is good. Let’s iterate this until it’s perfect. I think attempted unnecessarily waters it down. How about ICE shoots a US citizen in the back of the head in front of children.
ICE executes a US citizen with a shot in the back of the head in front of children.
Here, I fixed the headline for you.
Per the article:
He is still alive
ICE attempts to murder a US citizen with a shot in the back of the head in front of children.
Nailed it?
Okay this is good.
Let’s iterate this until it’s perfect. I think attempted unnecessarily waters it down.
How about
ICE shoots a US citizen in the back of the head in front of children.